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Stand-Alone Paragraph Task
ReplyDeleteSignificance of Dogs to Humans
Dogs are very important to humans due to their many uses. Dogs are used in several locations around the world including China and Indonesia as a food source. The local “batak” people of Indonesia use dog meat much like how a chef at a restaurant would use beef as a cooking ingredient. It is an important food source which the “Batak” people of Indonesia use to support their family. Another essential use of dogs to people is their capability to aid in a number of ways with their keen senses. Dogs can be used for guidance, either to guide the physically disabled or to aid hunters to track game. Their keen senses are also used by the police to detect illegal substances and chase down criminals. Dogs are even used for security whether it is to guard private homes from robberies or likewise to aid police in taking down criminals. Another role in which dogs play a key role in human society is that of entertainment. Dogs are kept as pets and have even been used to play major roles in movies. Dogs have even been termed “man’s best friend”, due to their loyalty and entertainment to the owners and their family. All in all dogs play an essential role in human society ranging from their use as a food source, for guidance and furthermore entertainment.
Introducing Indonesian Culture through Films
ReplyDeleteIndonesia has been introducing its culture and uniqueness through both local and Hollywood films for years. For example, Indonesia has introduced the world to its own form of martial art called Silat through Gareth Evans' gut-wrenching film, "The Raid". The film has been receiving great responses from international audiences who were fascinated by the Indonesian traditional martial art and the film itself. Another example comes from an American film called "Eat, Pray, Love", which was shot in India, Italy, and of course, Indonesia. The film displayed Indonesia's beauty and cultural uniqueness through the island of Bali. To sum up, not only that it's used as a form of entertainment, film is also used as a marketing media by most nations, including Indonesia.
Children and Their Imaginary Friends
ReplyDeleteImaginary friends are imaginary creatures often created by young children. It is common for children to have imaginary friends considering they tend to have strong imagination. But, they may have their reason for creating those imaginary creatures. Such as, being a home alone with busy working parents. Without the presence of parents, their first social teacher and friends, they would grew up lacking social skills. This would make children have difficulties in making real friends which leads to them creating imaginary friends to fend off loneliness. We can see that the lack of social relationship can cause children to have imaginary friends.
Humans and Machines
ReplyDeleteHuman's work are now mostly replaced with machines. It is common since machines are a lot more simple and fast than that of human resources. Besides that, machines are believed to be cheaper than hiring a lot of people to work on it. For example, farmers only need a few tractors, rather than hiring a number of people to harvest crops. Factories now use machines to create and pack products such as capping and toothpaste, rather than having them manmade for faster production and shipping proccess. Even nowadays, cleaning robots have been invented to replace maids. In short, a lot of people tend to lose their jobs because of this
Technologies of 3D Movies
ReplyDelete3D movies – or known as 3 dimensional movies – have become a trend in the recent years due to its latest technologies in the movie industry. The technologies used for these movies are to transform the 2D or 2 dimensional visual images to certain color sensitivity throughout its objects so that it appears 3 dimensionally when the audience sees it through 3D glasses. These glasses are made specifically to view the 3D movies properly so that our eyes can see it as if it is in 3 dimensions. For example, if we see a 3D movie without the special glasses, then we will only see a regular 2D movie with red and blue shadows that surround the objects while if we wear the special glass then we will see the movie as if it is real, which is in 3 dimensions. Therefore, the invention of the technologies of 3D movies creates another way of our eyes to perceive movies in a whole different experience.
Bad Effects of Eating Meat
ReplyDeleteDo you know that eating meat can cause serious health issues? When we were little our parents, and ever doctors used to tell us to eat meat, so that we can grow big and strong. But what they didn't tell you are the bad things it does to your body. You know that saturated fat is bad. Well, meat contains lots of it. It can cause artery damage which leads to high blood pressure. Besides that, meat is also very high in calories, as a result you'll gain weight faster and can cause obecity. Lastly, maybe one of the most dangerous and fatal effect of eating meat is the deadly cancer. Scientists have learned that people who eat meat has 20% more chance of getting cancer that people who doesn't eat meat. And there are several more bad effects that I may not mention above. So you might want to consider to cut back eating meat.
Jessica Kurniawati Putri
Chocolate as Comfort Food
ReplyDeleteChocolate has been known to be a 'comfort food', which means the kind of food people consume when they are feeling unhappy, for many people. It has a reputation as a mood-booster, and this statement has been scientifically proven. Often said as contributors to obesity, chocolate is actually a healthy comfort food, as long as it's eaten in moderation. In USA, where the mean body mass is highest, the chocolate consumption is less than half of Switzerland, who tops the ranks of chocolate-loving nations with an average consumption of 22 pounds of chocolate per year. One thing to note, when eating chocolate while you're unhappy, pick dark chocolate as it contains much less sugar compared to the other two kinds; milk and white chocolate. In brief, as long as it's eaten in moderation and you eat dark chocolates instead of white or milk chocolates, chocolates act as a healthy kind of comfort food.
Isabella Rosselinni
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